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Don't you just hate those tardy obstructions?
i know i do and wish i could do this :D
hope you like it :)

:bulletred: jumps over the first
:bulletgreen: slides under the second

I will sort the ending out :)
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:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Impact

This is awesome, but since you requested critique I'll comply to help you~

Things I love:
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletgreen:" title="Bullet; Green" /> The shading, and the misshapen tardmote mouths
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletgreen:" title="Bullet; Green" /> The way the emote spins when it leaps
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletgreen:" title="Bullet; Green" /> How both other the tardmotes are doing something different
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletgreen:" title="Bullet; Green" /> The timing/speed is good
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletgreen:" title="Bullet; Green" /> The idea and title! Things pulling ninja stunts around stupid things are awesome!

Things that are meh:
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletred:" title="Bullet; Red" /> The emotes have (generally) fixed expressions
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletred:" title="Bullet; Red" /> The emote doesn't appear to move forwards when it slides, so it looks more like it’s just ducking, which is okay, but looks slightly stiff...
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletred:" title="Bullet; Red" /> The yellow emote doesn't seem be moving 'forwards' as it is too near to the right hand side of the image

Possible Improvements:
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletpurple:" title="Bullet; Purple" /> Have the yellow emote change expressions depending on what it's doing- e.g. when it leaps/lands have it open its mouth in a yell or close its eyes bracing itself etc instead of it staying indifferent, heck it could even grin at it's success, or look annoyed that there's some tards in its way, anything~
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletpurple:" title="Bullet; Purple" /> Move the yellow away from the side and into the centre, which would better give the illusion of movement, and so the tards don't vanish immediately.
<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt=":bulletpurple:" title="Bullet; Purple" /> (this might be remedied by the one above) Have the ducked down emote move forwards while its sliding (towards the left), then it appears to be going in the opposite direction to the blue one, then slowly move it back to the center (back to the right) as the green approaches, ready pop back up and then jump again.

Overall, it's a nice, clean, lively and bouncy emoticon, if slightly stiff in some frames towards the end. I love it <3
The first half of it is good, the leap is perfectly executed (you've got that down), but it looks slightly odd and stiff after it lands.

Hope that helps~